Poem - A Wurmian's Life

[Dannyiron 6]

Wurmians, Wurmians, poor and rich,

handle to hammer, needle to stitch,

houses and mansions, villas and shacks,

fine fabrics to wear or simple tattered sacks;

every Wurmian has a right to be free,

a right to cut and grow their on trees,

to smell fresh flowers buzzing with bees,

to walk on their legs or crawl on their knees,

to be called by a name such as Koko or Peeves,

to watch the falling of the first Autumn leaves,

to wear the finest or cheapest vambraces or greaves,

to walk on the land or sail the many seas,

to hammer out tools or to stich together sleeves,

every Wurmian has a right to be free.

To be free of debt, to have lots of money,

to not have a worry and to endulge on fine honey,

to own the most expensive horse or bunny,

that is the life of the rich Wurmian.

He has and buys everything he could ever need,

from the hammer he uses to books he shall read,

the finest vintage wine or a classic old mead,

the fastest and the most splendorous steed,

The shiniest and the prettiest bead,

the estates of which he has ownership of deed,

the trouble-free life of the rich Wurmian man.

Absolved of sin but not of debt;

morally strong but of poor aesthetics kept,

begging for just a crumb of bread,

to prevent the risk of simply dropping down dead,

for he cannot eat a heavy chunk of lead,

or at least that's what everyone said,

wandering the streets like a lonely tramp,

through the hot and boiling, and the cold and damp,

but there's one thing he never forgets:

He's simply happy with what he gets,

For he is not like the many many greedy,

he accepts what he gets because he is needy,

The absolute agony of the poor Wurmian man.

Just what came to my head, was wondering if something like that is any good?

[EliasTheCrimson 348]

I like it alot, although I find the last two verses to be somewhat more difficult to relate to Wurm directly.

[Wossoo 1916]

Its nice... I wouldnt post any poem I wrote here though... people would complain that it doesnt rhyme (Poems dont have to rhyme  :-X) and might not understand the heavy use of metaphor 

[Dannyiron 6]

I like it alot, although I find the last two verses to be somewhat more difficult to relate to Wurm directly.

Thanks

Indeed, I thought of this while I was writing it - but I thought "perhaps I should entwine what we have now and some idealistic/realistic idea or dream of what perhaps may come?

Well, yes it's not entirely accurate directly to Wurm currently, my apologies

Its nice... I wouldnt post any poem I wrote here though... people would complain that it doesnt rhyme (Poems dont have to rhyme  :-X) and might not understand the heavy use of metaphor 

Thanks

Mm, I didn't know if anyone would catch upon use of metaphor/similie/alliteration/onomatopoeia/rule of 3 etc but if I thought of an appropriate place i'd try or will try to include it

Indeed as well, poems do not have to rhyme but I enjoy making them rhyme

I'll see if I can add another verse in with some poetry techniques and such

[Guest Ephemeral]

Poems don't have to rhyme. The ones that do need to follow a strict meter to avoid sucking horrible balls when read aloud.

You apparently seem to grasp meter in the first 5 lines or so of your poem, then in your phrenic rage to make the entire thing rhyme, drop any and all form of rhythm down the toliet with rampant syncopation.

A novel concept, and I applaud your effort in making it rhyme as well as it does, but aside from the face value this poem offers, there's not much more to it. Poetry works best with an ulterior motive.

[Ghosted 0]

Personaly if a verse doesn't fit wurm I don't care.

I enjoyed reading it.

Good work DannyIron!

[Guest Moonlight-Zelda]

I agree with Wossoo, poems don't have to rhyme (Take a peek at Haiku, for example) and they can still be very good. Personally, I really enjoyed this poem. 

[Dannyiron 6]

Poems don't have to rhyme. The ones that do need to follow a strict meter to avoid sucking horrible balls when read aloud.

You apparently seem to grasp meter in the first 5 lines or so of your poem, then in your phrenic rage to make the entire thing rhyme, drop any and all form of rhythm down the toliet with rampant syncopation.

A novel concept, and I applaud your effort in making it rhyme as well as it does, but aside from the face value this poem offers, there's not much more to it. Poetry works best with an ulterior motive.

Hmm, an interesting opinion. Thanks; I do enjoy poems that rhyme more so than those that don't personally and I know they don't have to, but I do like them to rhyme.

I think I get what you mean; sort of make a contrast of rhyming/non rhymic, a compromise between the two?

Well that is an interesting opinion and something to think about. Thank you

Personaly if a verse doesn't fit wurm I don't care.

I enjoyed reading it.

Good work DannyIron!

Thank you

I agree with Wossoo, poems don't have to rhyme (Take a peek at Haiku, for example) and they can still be very good. Personally, I really enjoyed this poem.   

Thanks to you too

Indeed they do not have to rhyme, but as I said I like poems that rhyme a touch more and I don't find it that hard to get some sort of baseline of rhyming, but still, maybe a contrast between the two

[Guest Ephemeral]

Sacrifice rhyme for sensory language.

That's all you have to do to make a poem that doesn't rhyme.