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[Fixed] Phrasing/grammar in fruit/veg descriptions

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This week in nitpicking descriptions:

 

Green apple A fruit, once probably picked from a tree. 

"Fruit, picked from a tree" makes more sense. 

 

Blue mushroom  A weird mushroom with a blue shining thick and broad hat and a sturdy white foot. 

'A weird mushroom with a thick, broad, shining blue hat and a sturdy white foot.' reads better. Or maybe just 'a thick, shining, blue hat.'

 

Buffalo cheese  A mild cheese with nutty taste made from buffalo milk. 

A nitpick, but we don't have buffalo!

 

Cabbage A leafy green vegetable, grown for their dence leaved heads. 

Dense, not dence. 

 

Corn A corn stick. Corn will be hard to grow in this environment. It is normally used to cook and eat, or to sow with. 

Corn cob, not stick. (Corn stick IS a recipe that exists IRL, but it's not the whole veggie that comes off the stalk.)

 

Oat A few handfuls of oat. Oat is not the easiest of crops to grow. It is normally used to turn into flour and bake with or to sow with. It is also very tasteful as porridge.

Tasty, instead of tasteful.

 

Potato  A potato. potatoes can be pretty hard to grow to edible size. 
Capital P in Potatoes.

 

Pumpkin  A nice red pumpkin.

Pumpkins are orange!

 

Salt  Fine white, chunky salt. 

Reads a bit oddly, as fine can mean "good quality" as well as the opposite of chunky. Maybe just 'Chunky white salt' or 'Chunky grains of white salt'?

 

 

 

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