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A Poem For Xallo

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This man called Xallo

Is a mighty fine fellow.

Makes his own sailboat,

Improves his drake coat.

 

But although Chas is calling,

His wife will not stop bawling.

Afraid to cross over

He is a pushover.

 

Xallo, what are you doing?

From this mountain we are viewing

The path that you will sail

If you choose not to bail.

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Critical appreciation of the Poem:

One of the great works of Vinius himself. We observe how the writer mentions the protagonist and his struggles to reach a far away land. We also learn how in his absence the kingdom struggles to keep pace and fight the challenges. On the other hand the poet is very clear about how this majestic warrior fought in past.

 

Well we could easily say this is among, one of the best works produced by Vinius. Though we see his lack of poetry experience and the words used in the poem are of normal English origin. Thus the writer does not use words from other languages or the Elizabethan English but he gets the job done. 

 

Overall we observe, use of normal rhyming scheme with poetic justification and a question in the end. The vision that the poet gives in the end leaves the audience wondering how this all will and end and how the choices made by the lead character affect the fates of others. Good work of Wurm literature and must be preserved in the Hall of fame.

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Hrm, not bad; though, I quibble over fellow not being a full syllabic rhyme of Xallo. Calling and bawling are a better effort.

 

Rhyming so greasy,

making me queasy.

 

Xallo for tallow.

Rather than fellow.

 

Then again much can depend on how one pronounces Xallo out loud.

 

Do not stop with mere rhyming!  Alliteration, Assonance, and Consonance!

 

Was almost expecting a sonnet, even a Shakespearean, with the three quatrains; however, missing a couplet for that full fourteen.

 

 

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